Would appreciate feedback on my landing pages

#1

1: What challenge are you currently trying to solve? Give as much detail as possible
I’d like to improve conversions


2: How are you driving traffic to your page?
organic
pinterest
facebook


3: What is your conversion goal?
20%

4: Provide a link to your published landing page / convertable:

0 Likes

#2

Hi Jayne,

Welcome to the Unbounce community! Thanks for sharing your page. I created a video review for you with some feedback. You can see it here: https://www.loom.com/share/47c2a8642696409e8c89a253b9da8897

Also, here are the 2 reference links I mentioned in the video:


https://tobiasguitar.com/

Regards,

2 Likes

#3

Hi @jaynecn

First off, I like that the hero image is looking towards the form! Helps the user know where to be looking. Nice! Below are five suggestions to help the page convert more…

:one: Emotional headline. This is for artists! So capture their emotional needs first. Something like, “Develop your voice, develop your passion.”

:two: I would also add a subtitle… “The ABC’s of singing” That helps clarify what level we are at.

:three: I like the form and button text. But could use a little more detail. How much? How long? Will you work with my budget? Adding a couple more points before the form won’t hurt.

:four: Those testimonials are rough. Gotta clean them up. PLEASE make all the fonts the same! Also add quotation marks and a name if you can. They need to look reliable, and right now they do not.

:five: Add another section with a brief bio description about the teacher and the school.

And a bonus if you really want conversions. Offer an incentive for signing up!
…One free lesson for signing up today!
…10% off your first program by signing up now.
…Beats-by-Dre headphones if you sign up.

You get it :wink:

0 Likes