Would appreciate feedback on my landing pages

jaynecn

1: What challenge are you currently trying to solve? Give as much detail as possible
I’d like to improve conversions

2: How are you driving traffic to your page?
organic
pinterest
facebook

3: What is your conversion goal?
20%

4: Provide a link to your published landing page / convertable:

2 replies

Nicholas
Userlevel 7
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Hi Jayne,

Welcome to the Unbounce community! Thanks for sharing your page. I created a video review for you with some feedback. You can see it here: https://www.loom.com/share/47c2a8642696409e8c89a253b9da8897

Also, here are the 2 reference links I mentioned in the video:


https://tobiasguitar.com/

Regards,

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Kyle.C
Userlevel 5

Hi @jaynecn

First off, I like that the hero image is looking towards the form! Helps the user know where to be looking. Nice! Below are five suggestions to help the page convert more…

1️⃣ Emotional headline. This is for artists! So capture their emotional needs first. Something like, “Develop your voice, develop your passion.”

2️⃣ I would also add a subtitle… “The ABC’s of singing” That helps clarify what level we are at.

3️⃣ I like the form and button text. But could use a little more detail. How much? How long? Will you work with my budget? Adding a couple more points before the form won’t hurt.

4️⃣ Those testimonials are rough. Gotta clean them up. PLEASE make all the fonts the same! Also add quotation marks and a name if you can. They need to look reliable, and right now they do not.

5️⃣ Add another section with a brief bio description about the teacher and the school.

And a bonus if you really want conversions. Offer an incentive for signing up!
…One free lesson for signing up today!
…10% off your first program by signing up now.
…Beats-by-Dre headphones if you sign up.

You get it 😉

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