I’m going to echo a lot of the feedback you’d already received, especially around clarifying what it is you’re offering.
The headline isn’t bad. You offer a clear benefit, particularly on the first option. You just need to pay it off sooner. Perhaps include a subhead and or supporting bullets and a clear CTA.
Then, I’d get into the type of info you have near the bottom how it works for you section to give some of the details.Then you want to sped the rest of the page answering questions, addressing potential concerns, reducing friction and adding urgency.
Along those lines, do you have any testimonials or social proof you can leverage to build credibility? Are there a lot of businesses using this? If so, you could include a line like “Join X,XXX businesses…”
From a copy standpoint, I think you use too much “we.” Users care about themselves, so focus on them.
Free is a great selling point, and I think you can use it more. For instance, you can easily use it in your CTAs.
Speaking of the CTAs, I would make them more specific and benefit-oriented. Instead of “Get started,” which doesn’t indicate what to expect next, why not something like “Get your free storefront”? or “Add my business.”
You could do something similar to the wording in the form as well. Become a Procally Professional is a bit vague. Spell out what that means and why they should want to do it.
Best of luck.