Review my landing page


#1

hello i’m new to this. please check my landing page on http://www.safariforwomen.com any feedback is appreciated! thank you


#2

Hi,

Main thing that stands out to me is the testimonial does not read like real feedback, not very natural. It sounds like a written sales pitch. You should also include a privacy policy too. 

On the contact form I would take off the question “Interested in our service?” Replace it with a stronger emotional title like “Take The First Step In Your Journey” I would take off all those tick boxes, you tell them what they are signing up for in the copy rather than asking them. Change the button text to something like “Send Me More Info”

Maybe a little more imagery of some of the wonderful scenery, wildlife etc to begin to paint the picture. 

I am not an expert, those are just a few initial observations :wink:

Good luck