Pre launch Landing page feedback - It’s time our phones caught up to our workflow

1: What challenge are you currently trying to solve? Give as much detail as possible
I want to explain the pain point as clearly as possible.
I want to create a little bit of energy and excitement about being a part of the solution.
I want to collect survey forms from interested guests.


2: How are you driving traffic to your page?
Nothing set in stone yet. I am planning on writing and giving away other software integrations I’ve built around productivity. Then share that with communities on Reddit, IndieHackers, and once the MVP is up, ProductHunt and HackerNews. Any advice would be much appreciated! :smile:

3: What is your conversion goal?
5%


4: Provide a link to your published landing page / convertable:
https://appaflow.com

Hi Keenan.

It’s good that you want to hit on the pain point, but I don’t think the current page really does that.

The headline is too generic to have any real meaning or impact. Try to come up with something more specific that will hook the reader.

I think you need to do explain how your product works or at least what it does a bit more specifically. Why should anyone believe this will make the Inca easier? Paint a picture for the reader.

You should also rewrite your main section to be more prospect focused. Look how many times you use the word “we.” Instead use “you.” That’s what people care about.

Hope that helps. Best of luck.

Hi kkarich,
I have a few observations.

  1. You need to show real picture rather than cartoon picture.

  2. Secondly you need to have a different section and need an information and email collect form like
    the following Unbounce page: http://unbouncepages.com/doctor-appointment/