Please help with landing page


#1

1: What challenge are you currently trying to solve?

The color cohesiveness is off and it doesn’t look as appealing as I would like it to be. I have ran out of ideas. I want something clean and professional.

2: How are you driving traffic to your page?
Google Adwords & SEO


3: What is your conversion goal?
I don’t have one yet.

4: Provide a link to your published landing page / convertable:
http://unbouncepages.com/charitable-solicitation-laws/


#2

Hi there!

The URL you provided is not working.


#3

http://unbouncepages.com/charitable-solicitation-laws/

Sorry about that. I forgot to publish the page.


#4

Hi @Labyrinth92008!

Here are some items to get started on:

  • :warning:The first thing I would focus on is making this page mobile-ready! Just click on the mobile button in the editor to begin making your changes.

  • Most of the content on the page is a bit difficult to read. The white text on top of the hero photo could be helped by playing a color overlay on the photo (perhaps that dark blue color). In addition, the yellow text on the white is also difficult to read.

  • Is the hero a stock image? Perhaps use a photo that is more related to your service would work better. That photo looks like they are surveying land or making maps…

  • I would style the form in a different way. It is not aesthetically pleasing having the fields touch the sides of the box it sits in. I would make the box larger.

  • Change color of the CTA - it blends in with the page while it needs to stand out!

  • This paragraph is a bit wordy, “Fundraising activities, no matter what method your nonprofit is using to fundraise, if the underlying activity is solicitation or asking for donations, that is regulated activity in most states.” - Remove the first two words.

  • List those text items in bullet form on one side of the form. Having them scattered can distract the user from converting.

  • The form confirmation box doesn’t match what is on the page.

  • There is extra space on the right-hand side

  • Make sure to add your favicon before you publish!

I hope you find this helpful!
If you would like to make life a little easier… Start out with one of Unbounce’s templates: https://unbounce.com/landing-page-templates/


#5

Thank you Caroline. I hadn’t worked on the mobile version as of yet. Your feedback is very useful. I will implement those.